I am assuming you are talking about a kick-out flashing.
For the purposes of showing a home owner some details, I think your drawings will work fine, but I feel that actual step 1, step 2, etc...actual job photos would do yourself more justice. Also, I too disagree with the bottom step flashing baby tin being exposed, but as long as it works for you, that is what counts.
Have you considered the details from the NRCA or SMACNA manuals to import into your presentation?
I like actual photos better still though.